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Brother and sister orphans Leon and Rilya lives change in an instant when a call of draft of all able body men is instated in their village of Old Babels by a regiment of militants compose of entirely of killers and rapists who threaten torture and death of the love ones of those who try to flee the call of duty. Rilya is only a child and only has Leon due to those factors Leon decides to makes an attempt to flee the call to duty with Rilya. They almost escape when they are not only spotted by the militants but by a winged woman as well claiming to be an Underground Railroad agent of the city of New Babel which is the thorn on the sides of Leon and Rilya betters. She only has the strength and time to fly away one of them to safety as the militants close in on the three. Leon in merely seconds must decide to trust the stranger with his only family and he does. Leon then saves his self by saying he had ran to save his sister from being taken by the winged woman. They believe him for not all those taken in by the Underground Railroad of New Babel do so out of their own free will and so Leon must survive the company of people he knows only to be criminals and Rilya the company of a complete stranger.
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Past drafts of the beginning of the story dealt with Leon or narrator telling about the draft and the enforcement of it in past tense and the winged women being not a stranger to him but someone he got to know and decided upon with much time and care to entrust Rilya to who has always been stranger to the winged women who name is Dime by the way. Those prior drafts just didn’t feel right they seem too impossible to me but the thing is I really need to embrace the impossible even more to make thing more believable. That to say the situation of the three as depicted in prior drafts just didn’t seem dramatic enough to call for Leon fear and entrustment of Rilya to Dime.
What am I trying to do? I want to call attention to the full spectrum of terrorism in that is actually in America because I think in the last decade we have forgot that charity begins at home. Of course if I did this via essays I would probably be seen as possessing anti American sentiment and unpatriotic plus people who speaks out against the established order having a tendency of finding their selves in early graves (an example being the noble Martin Luther King Jr.). Common sense will tell anyone that if ya are dead it more then a little hard to fulfill your goals if ya are six feet under. So how do I get around that issue? Easy I hide my essays in the hyperbole of entertaining fantasy stories. It work for Final Fantasy VII which had it been release post 9-11-2001 rather then 1997 it heroes who at least initially are terrorists (well at least in the eye of Shinra Corporation who were a very America like power in FF7 world[and to sound a little more patriotic comparable to the financial terrorists that make up wall street, banks, and corporation executives in America]) probably would had been frown upon by the incompetent parents, incompetent news media, and incompetent politicians who rather waste time and make things worst by playing the blame game rather then doing their jobs to make things better.
Past drafts of the beginning of the story dealt with Leon or narrator telling about the draft and the enforcement of it in past tense and the winged women being not a stranger to him but someone he got to know and decided upon with much time and care to entrust Rilya to who has always been stranger to the winged women who name is Dime by the way. Those prior drafts just didn’t feel right they seem too impossible to me but the thing is I really need to embrace the impossible even more to make thing more believable. That to say the situation of the three as depicted in prior drafts just didn’t seem dramatic enough to call for Leon fear and entrustment of Rilya to Dime.
What am I trying to do? I want to call attention to the full spectrum of terrorism in that is actually in America because I think in the last decade we have forgot that charity begins at home. Of course if I did this via essays I would probably be seen as possessing anti American sentiment and unpatriotic plus people who speaks out against the established order having a tendency of finding their selves in early graves (an example being the noble Martin Luther King Jr.). Common sense will tell anyone that if ya are dead it more then a little hard to fulfill your goals if ya are six feet under. So how do I get around that issue? Easy I hide my essays in the hyperbole of entertaining fantasy stories. It work for Final Fantasy VII which had it been release post 9-11-2001 rather then 1997 it heroes who at least initially are terrorists (well at least in the eye of Shinra Corporation who were a very America like power in FF7 world[and to sound a little more patriotic comparable to the financial terrorists that make up wall street, banks, and corporation executives in America]) probably would had been frown upon by the incompetent parents, incompetent news media, and incompetent politicians who rather waste time and make things worst by playing the blame game rather then doing their jobs to make things better.
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